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Love the animation style. Seeing as you're asking for feedback, here's where I think it could be improved.
I think the text tag lines could use a bit of editing - one or two don't read as well as they might - I'll watch it again to see if I can make specific suggestions.
I'd cut out the two 'birds' being cut to as you pan up the flag dropper. They have more of a 1970's vibe than the rest of the video, and are a little bit over the top in my opinion. Although the bikes are more 1970's than late 50's/early 60's British, so maybe the mix is ok.
Finally, I'm not sure about the western-influence in the Coffee House Cowboys - where did this come from? Seems a little out of synch with the Ace Cafe and other British references. You might also have difficulty with the Ace Cafe trademark police. Might want to consider a more generic cafe?
Oh, and the bikes seem to be missing their steering heads - how are the front forks being held onto the frames?
Feel free to drop the DO THE TON logo in there The riders jackets could use some patches!
I think the text tag lines could use a bit of editing - one or two don't read as well as they might - I'll watch it again to see if I can make specific suggestions.
I'd cut out the two 'birds' being cut to as you pan up the flag dropper. They have more of a 1970's vibe than the rest of the video, and are a little bit over the top in my opinion. Although the bikes are more 1970's than late 50's/early 60's British, so maybe the mix is ok.
Finally, I'm not sure about the western-influence in the Coffee House Cowboys - where did this come from? Seems a little out of synch with the Ace Cafe and other British references. You might also have difficulty with the Ace Cafe trademark police. Might want to consider a more generic cafe?
Oh, and the bikes seem to be missing their steering heads - how are the front forks being held onto the frames?
Feel free to drop the DO THE TON logo in there
The riders jackets could use some patches!
HerrDeacon
Over 1,000 Posts
Really cool vid. Love the animation style. So is this just a teaser of the actual video? Meaning, is there a longer version in the works?
this video is a preview of the movie that I am working on. Tim, I'll definately throw in the Do the Ton logo in there if I could get some patches your talking about...lol I'll consider all the suggestions to try to make it more authentic. The quotes and the title are actually a real quote that some cafe racer said way back in the days. Thanks for the nice comments.
dirtywhiteboy
Do what cha does...........
I thought it was badass.........
Kev Nemo
Honda Hacker
reminded me of this, but I'm old:
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I picked the literal version because it's funnier.
Awesome work-what did you use?
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I picked the literal version because it's funnier.
Awesome work-what did you use?
fastlee84
Active Member
Love the clip! But i can't see the connection of the Western coffee club? with the rest of the clip.. Thats American(cowboy eras) and the Rockers are brits.
Juz my opinion, but i really love the clip overall.. Very cool!! And ya, do add the DTT patch somewhere... hehehe..
Looking forward to ther rest of the movie.
Juz my opinion, but i really love the clip overall.. Very cool!! And ya, do add the DTT patch somewhere... hehehe..
Looking forward to ther rest of the movie.
